What does beauty really mean？ Everybody has it's own definition. The standard of beauty changes with different society， culture and nations. Some hold the point that the beautiful appearance is of great importance， which is visible to all. Others have the idea that the spiritual beauty is the loveliest one， which lasts long. However different it might be， their opinions are all acceptable.

　　什么是美呢？每個人都有自己的定義。美的標(biāo)準(zhǔn)因社會、文化和國度不同而產(chǎn)生差異。有的人認(rèn)為相貌上的美是最重要、最直觀的美；有的人認(rèn)為心靈上的美是最可愛、最長久的美。雖然這些想法大不相同，但是它們對美的定義卻都是不無道理的。

　　二、創(chuàng)設(shè)情境來源：

　　以“ What is beauty in your mind？ ”為主題，發(fā)表自己的觀點，題目自擬。要求：

　　1. 行文流暢，觀點鮮明，論證充分；

　　2. 內(nèi)容豐富，層次分明，邏輯性強；

　　3. 詞數(shù) 150 左右。

　　三、學(xué)生習(xí)作

　　※正方習(xí)作※

　　Beauty will buy no beef

　　Everyone admires beauty. Everyone has his own standard about beauty.

　　Nowadays some people tend to think that they own beauty if they have a good looking. They are not satisfied with their appearance. They spend much money taking a kind of operation. Can beauty really be man-made？ If so， everybody can get beauty. As a result， there is no beauty at all.

　　The appearance is given by our parents and is unique in the world. Everyone should value it. I'd （ 1 ） rather prefer nature as the standard of beauty. Just accept yourself， accept everything the god gives to you， and create the beautiful life （ 2 ） belong to you.

　　Many heroes don't have beautiful surface. However， their beautiful images often come to our minds. Their beauty comes from their contributions to the society.

　　Don't be eager to judge whether a person is beautiful or not without a thorough understanding of him. A beautiful person is not the one with a good looking， but with a broad and kind heart.

　　Good looking is pleasant while spiritual beauty is more important. As an old saying goes， “ Virtue is fairer than beauty. ” If you have a kind heart， you own real beauty.

　　點評：

　　本文以諺語“漂亮不能當(dāng)飯吃”為題，直截了當(dāng)?shù)亓脸隽俗约旱挠^點。全文以“美德勝于美貌”為主線，闡述了“追求外形美而放棄了內(nèi)在美并不是真正的美”，“英雄之美源于奉獻(xiàn)”。文章觀點鮮明，行文順暢，結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)，用詞恰當(dāng)。難能可貴的是，作者能運用諺語來強化自己的觀點，有較強的英語語言組織能力和表達(dá)能力。

　　文中語言錯誤：（ 1 ） I'd rather prefer 改為 I'd prefer . would rather 表“寧愿”， prefer 也是“寧愿”，兩者不能連用在一起。（ 2 ） belong to 改為 belonging to . belonging to you 在此處作定語。

　　※反方習(xí)作※

　　A good face is a letter of recommendation

　　Some people say beauty is just a skin deep. I don't quite agree with them. Good appearance often makes a big difference in social communication， competition， finding jobs and so on. Not only can good appearance help you become more confident， but also it helps you be impressed. If you want to get a good job， the first sight is important. Physical beauty is （ 1 ） probable to draw much attention.

　　However， we have to face this problem. We have no right to choose our appearance. When necessary， we can make up ourselves. If you think doing this is a good way to improve your confidence， just do what you really want to regardless （ 2 ） others' opinion. It is worth all the money and time. Facing a variety of social pressures， we young people should build confidence. Confidence is the key to success.

　　In a word， you may not be the most beautiful one， but you can be the most attractive one； you may not the best one， but you can be the most confident one. Show yourself and chances will kiss you in time.

　　點評：愛美之心，人皆有之。一副好臉孔就是一封介紹信。作者圍繞這一主題進(jìn)行闡述。在現(xiàn)代社會里，美麗的外表在社交、競爭、求職等方面的有著不可低估的作用。作者立意大膽，構(gòu)思巧妙，很有個性。文章敘述清楚，條理清晰，層次分明，過渡自然。在語言表達(dá)上，巧妙地使用了倒裝、排比等句式和一些“亮點”詞語，增強了文章的感染力。對于一名中學(xué)生來說，本文不愧是一篇優(yōu)秀習(xí)作。

　　文中語言錯誤：（ 1 ） probable 改為 likely . probable 不能用某人或某物作主語，常用 it 作形式主語，構(gòu)成 it is probable for sb. to do sth. 結(jié)構(gòu)。（ 2 ） regardless 之后加 of . regardless of 是復(fù)合介詞，意為“不理會，不顧”。
 

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