仔細(xì)觀察下面的圖畫，然后解釋每一幅圖畫所代表的意義，并合理預(yù)測(cè)煙草未來(lái)銷售的情況，說(shuō)明你的理由：
二、學(xué)生習(xí)作
We meet smokers everywhere. There are 5.8 billion people in the world, and there are① about 1.2 billion of them are smokers, which make up to 20 percent of the world's total population.
Smoking is very harmful. First, smoking costs a great number② of money. It wastes 200 billion dollars each year in the world. Second, smoking does harm to the health of smokers and even the people near them. About 3 million people die of disease③ caused by smoking every year.
Luckily, more and more people have come to realize the great harm of smoking. To our delight the total amount of world tobacco production have④ dropped from over 14 billion pounds in 2000 to 7 billion pounds in 2003. It is sure⑤ that the number of smokers will farther⑥ decrease gradual⑦.
三、修改說(shuō)明
①該句為雙謂語(yǔ)錯(cuò)誤句型，應(yīng)去掉there are。②money為不可數(shù)名詞，number應(yīng)改為deal。③吸煙所造成的疾病較多，disease應(yīng)改為diseases。④主語(yǔ)amount為不可數(shù)名詞，作主語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞應(yīng)用單數(shù)，have應(yīng)改為has。⑤sure不可用于主語(yǔ)從句，應(yīng)改為certain。⑥此處表進(jìn)一步的，應(yīng)用further而不可用farther。⑦decrease為行為動(dòng)詞，應(yīng)用副詞修飾，gradual應(yīng)改為gradually。
四、參考答案
We meet smokers everywhere. There are 5.8 billion people in the world, and about 1.2 billion of them are smokers, which make up to 20 percent of the world's total population.
Smoking is very harmful. First, smoking costs a great deal of money. It wastes 200 billion dollars each year in the world. Second, smoking does harm to the health of smokers and even the people near them. About 3 million people die of diseases caused by smoking every year.
Luckily, more and more people have come to realize the great harm of smoking. To our delight the total amount of world tobacco production has dropped from over 14 billion pounds in 2000 to 7 billion pounds in 2003. It is certain that the number of smokers will further decrease gradually.
五、點(diǎn)評(píng)
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